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The Gyrospire Towers – Beza and Zeka
Gyrospire Beza and Zeka are two of three towers made by Meldrath specifically to guard his keep and serve as a flanking force in attacks. Gyrospire Azia was destroyed in the attack by the Gnomes from Ak`Anon while Gyrospire Beza and Zeka both remain functional. Beza is currently the oldest tower. It was the second Gyrospire created, and has become the "lead" tower. Zeka is the newest tower, and one of Meldrath's experiments at an ultimate weapon. At the top of the tower is a large steam and magic powered catapult that can be used with devastating ability, though it is a bit cumbersome and ends up best used as a siege weapon. There were many failures and many tower designs before Zeka, but they all failed spectacularly. This final tower is a success.
Despite attempts to have the towers completely clockwork controlled, Meldrath found that some times a more creative brain is required. While clockworks dominate in Gyrospire Beza there are gnomes, brownies, and minotaurs in the zone as well. Gyrospire Zeka is a different story. The Captain of the tower, a steamwork, took it upon itself to remove all living creatures from its tower. It has such a hatred for anything living that it has systematically killed everything from Meldrath's gnomes to the rats in the walls. Nothing lives within this tower. The only living being that it will tolerate in its domain is Meldrath, and only because its programming to not harm Meldrath is so deep it has not been able to alter it. Meldrath tolerates this destruction because to him even his living servants are just tools to use and discard.
Here's my breakdown and what I don't understand.
"Gyrospire Azia was destroyed in the attack by the Gnomes..." Ummm, what attack? No attack has been mentioned yet.
"At the top of the tower is a large steam and magic powered catapult that can be used with devastating ability, though it is a bit cumbersome and ends up best used as a siege weapon."
Umm, catapults ARE seige weapons. That's what they were originally developed for -- to hurl big objects over walls or to pelt fortifications and damage them. Catapults really aren't that effective against troops because of the time and energy necesssary to move and rearm them.
"There were many failures and many tower designs before Zeka, but they all failed spectacularly."
Wow, talk about a run on sentence. The comma and second part are completely unnecessary. It could read something like this and be better: "There were many unsuccessful tower designs before Zeka that failed spectacularly." There, says the same thing without making me want to stab my eyes out.
The entire last sentence of the second paragraph could be omitted. I hate being browbeaten like that. It's already obvious that Meldrath the Malignant has little concern for life. You know, the Malignant title kind of gives that away as does the penchant for necromancy. Not to mention the whole building a massive fortress to conquer Ak'anon.
